Rhetorical response for Home Girl

There was many things that I liked about this essay. I didnt think it was going to be a very good story at first but after getting into it and after reading it I found it to be pretty interesting. One thing that I liked about Erykah. She is famous for singing, yet she wanted to be a normal person living a normal life. I found this kind of odd at first because usually people want to be famous so they can get all the attention and glory from fan and people. But, in this case Erykah Badu just was famous because she did what she loved to do. In the story it mentions that music is not even the most important thing in her life. She says that yes, it does make money but she actually loves to do things like raise her kids. I think that alot of famous might be able to relate to what she says. It seems like for the most part, after becoming famous, famous people just want to be normal and have regular lives. Well that is exactly what this home-town Dallas girl is doing. She get to do what everyone dreams of. Making a lot of money and being famous yet she wants to just have a normal life. The narrator did a good job on this story. For example the story is about Erykah Badu. It is not about the things she has accomplished or the songs or albums she sings. It is about her life and what she likes to do and how she acts at home. Another example of how the narrator also did this when he was talking about the grammy's that Erykah had won. It had not even mentioned the grammys but for only a brief moment. Although it was such a big accomplishment in her life in the story it had only said very little about it. The author also did a good job in other areas of the story. He didnt spend too much time on details that were not nessasary. We had talked about this in class today. It was one of the things that we looked for and talked about in the story along with how the author stayed more focused on her rather than the things she has done witch was also talked about in class. Back to having good detail, we talked about not putting useless and unmeaningful things into the story. Everything should relate back to the main purpose. Another thing that we talked about in class is having info that you can tell that there was an interview or resource other than observation. In the story it talked about how she dressed at home and what she was doing in particular cases in her house and so on. Well, this gives good descrition to the reader in many ways. The reader can tell that the narrator has talked to Eyrkah in an interview of some way or another. As talked about in class, that is also an important thing to do. In conslusion, I thought this was a good reading and that the narrator did a real good job on organizing the information and staying on point and overall writing a good story. I really enjoyed it.

In class: free write on Home Girl

I liked this essay. I was a reallly interesting reading. There were several things that I liked about this story. One thing I liked is that she doesnt reallylike to be famous. It is cool that she just wants to be a regular person. The story it talks about how she just likes to do regular things like go to the store for milk. I think that is real interesting because usually people would want to be famous. I liked how she just is famous because she does things she likes to do and music isnt her favorite thing to do. Just a home-town girl from Dallas.

I think that this image is very aggressive. It looks like the giant ape is very strong and can overpower other people and animals. It looks like people are amazed when seeing this animal. I feel like I would agree and have to say that I would also be amazed by seeing something like this giant animal. It looks like a cover to a book or movie. Witch I already know it is. The ape looks like he is protecting the woman he is holding. I feel like the animal is not normal in that sence if it can have feelings like that.


The story that this picture is telling me is that animals are different than we think. The ape in the picture is holding a woman. He is protecting her from something. She is not scared of him but the other people are so it must be protecting her from other people. The people in the movie thought that they could do what they want and kill him easily. He showed that he cared for her and protected her with his own life.


The colors in this picture makes it seem like it there is a happy sence in the place until this giant ape came along and ruined it. As if there was a town of happyness and joy and the giant ape came and took over.

I can tell that this image was create many many years ago because of how the people look in the picture and the whole image and the colors it consist of. A picture like this would not be created now a days. It doesnt look very real.


The image is trying to make me feel like bad things like this can happen in the city. In the background there is a big city with big buildings.

In Class: free write on authority list

x-box 360
playing football
cleaning- around the house
track-shotput and discus
cooking- baking
driving cars
talking to new people
playing board games
sleeping
swimming

These are some of the things that I feel that I have an authority on. Things such as cooking and driving cars are some things that I, of course, learned from my parents. Just watching my parents and family members so little things like cook and drive everyday I caught on very quickly. Now those are a couple things that alot of people are pretty good at and know how to do. A few things that I also have an authority on include, swimming, track and field, and playing xbox 360. These are things that I didn't have to learn from someone else to get better in. I initially learned how to do these things but my love of doing these things is what got me so far. People that first taught me how to swim we my mom and dad. My coach in high school, Will McNeil, taught me how to throw shot put and discus. Some of my friends, witch include Hunter, and Kameron got me into playing xbox 360, but I ultimitly taught myself how to play.

In this I included:
Mom, Marti
Dad, David
friends, Hunter and Kameron
coach, Will Mcneil

Will McNeil is one of my coaches from high school. Over my four years of high school he taught me many different things. Not only did this coach teach me about sports but, he also taught me important lessons in life. Other than learning from him in a personal sence, he taught me how to do better in football, and track. These are both things that I love to do. Learning how to be a good football player helped me save alot of money by recieving a scholorship in college. He was not only a coach to me but somewhat a friend. I enjoyed his company and talking with him as I still keep in touch with him even while I am in college.

In Class: Free write on essay 2

I have completed my second draft of essay two. I will still be needing to make a few changes on the essay. I have to add another source into my paper to have all five sources that are needed. I think that the essay is a pretty good one, but I don't think that this essay is my best. I enjoyed doing a little research after writing the personal narrative on the last essay.